Hard
Poem by: zeusdaughter24
Hard
That hard, just standing there, beckoning me on
pink softness, yet firm, wide girth, length so long
an invite to pleasure, no measure, to compare
lifting me up, from the bed, dizzying heights
unable to resist, to behold, such a sight
he that is strong, envelope me, take me on
a ride so unforgettable, an orgasmic flight
not of fancy but of lust, with every hard, savage thrust
lile a rutting stag, with passion, with bite
Every hair on my skin stands on end, as you bend
me over the bed, grab the hair on my head
thrust up and in, pleasure within, eyes water
My groans then erupt, my voice falters, my soul is on fire
For you're my man, my salvation, my hearts true desire
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Comments
This is REALLY REALLY GOOD! Oh Wow! So incredibly HOT! The imagery is crazy! You're playing with rhyme in an unusual way, and you really use enjambment well! It's unique and erotic and balanced. The final line is terrific..fantastic summation! (line 9 change lile to like)
Lines 6 and 7 show my most favorite example of your enjambment; "take me on - a ride so unforgettable" although there are several great ones here.
What's so incredible about this piece, you finish reading and you're sure that you just read the naughtiest poem - but nowhere do you get explicit! (I'm not opposed to explicit) But I'm just pointing out how you've played with language; your references, the mental picture....it's amazingly erotic with a PG rating! Few can do that...
This was primal, powerful and full of lust and yet smooth as a lake in the morning. Hot, passionate sex as most women like it. Nicely done; many lady readers will be smiling and dripping....
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I like to imagine my readers being taken on a sensuous journey through my literary orgasm xx and yes, the sex IS definitely as most women like...I fully agree, I like it to touch every fibre of my being and every millimetre of my skin... thank you again for such nice, silky words...x
You're on fire again! You have Gone Girl chomping at the bit! I've enjoyed your work for so long, yet I'm no longer writing here for you to hear my song! Yet if you will to Booksie.com you may go for over there I challenge, over there I flow! You have been a reader, you have been a friend... Will you keep on reading? 'Til the very end?
Gone Girl