The sparks that fly,
I see that wicked gleam in your eyes,
The slow seduction of your hands
Makes me pulse between my thighs,
Its the way you love me.
The sparks that fly,
Send me to my all time high,
I feel the pressure of my core,
Its the place you want me soar.
Its the way you love me.
The sparks that fly,
I'm finally alright,
Its you that's by my side.
Its the way you love me.
Submitted: April 25, 2015
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Can really feel the attraction. Your description is perfect :)
Sat, April 25th, 2015 4:09pm
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Thank you for all your lovely comments ??
Sat, April 25th, 2015 10:33am
Beautiful poem. Lust is flying really high tonight. Love it. Good job
Sun, April 26th, 2015 9:38pm
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Thank you much. I actually wrote it on a binge in the middle of the night just because some words just wouldn't leave my head.
Mon, April 27th, 2015 9:04am
You can definitely feel the lust,but also the love. Great poem!
Wed, May 27th, 2015 2:57am
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Thank you
Tue, May 26th, 2015 10:30pm
I absolutely love the way you intermingle repetitive lines through this piece. It makes the piece circular and symmetrical. There's a curious line here..."I'm finally alright". I love that you put that in there because it creates depth and wonder. There's more to this than this simple beautiful moment. The inference of a difficult past adds a special light.
(your 9th line, add "to" in front of 'soar')
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Thank you so much for all your wonderful comments. I know some things have to be edited because I wrote them so long ago I haven’t had a chance to go back and edit the mistakes, but thank you for catching it for me. I really appreciate all the feedback. You just made my day! ??
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flamestowater
This is really good.. Your words.. Rhyming.. Usage.. Everything good.
Sat, April 25th, 2015 2:46pmAuthor
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Thank you very much, the rhyming wasn't intentional. As crazy as it seems I wrote it at like one in the morning because some words just wouldn't leave my head. And for that thank you for reading and commenting! ????
Sat, April 25th, 2015 8:35am