When I got undressed, and turn out the lights, I drifted off into sleep. Soon, I escaped from the cold, harsh, reality of living a single life in a cheap apartment near downtown Denver. Everything is still and quiet in the inky darkness of the night. When the door opened softly, I sat up in bed afraid it was some creep who wanted something. I watched the tall dark outline, standing in the doorway, until I turned on the lamp by my bed to see who it was. I confess I was scared, but my curiosity was strangely aroused by the presence of this amazing, hot, and sexy stranger.
He was tall, about six feet tall, broad-shouldered with dark blue, piercing, eyes like the sea. His dark brown hair was cut short as well as being smooth. He had an alluring smile on those sinfully seductive lips. He walked towards my bed and as he did so I could feel my heart thumping loud and fast. He tore off his white T-shirt, making my mouth watered as I gazed lustfully at his moderately hairy, hard rock, chiseled chest. On his pecs, he had pierced nipples and on the lower right side of his massive body, he had the tattoo of a heart in flames. He pulled off his tight blue jeans to reveal his bushy crotch and a long, slightly hairy, uncut cock. His strong legs were like tree trunks. From head to toe he had the body of an incredible Greek god.
He came closer to me, and caress my head with his strong hand. I felt it move behind my head as he drew me closer to his monster-sized dick. I was afraid, and rather intimidated, but I couldn't resist that tempting delicious piece of meat. His cock felt good and warm inside my wet mouth. My tongue curled around it, like a juicy hot slim jim that I get at the nearby local convenient store. I looked up into those wicked amazing eyes as I serviced this specimen of masculinity.
“Go ahead. Savor that man meat, sweet boy.” he said to me in a husky voice.
The more I had it in my mouth, the more I loved it. He then told me to bend over and slid that monster cock into my tight hole. I couldn't help but to moan and grunt as he plowed me good, hard, and long. My ass felt tight and plugged up by his cock. I was feeling all wet with the sweat all over my body. This was incredible and sensually fantastic. He laid on top of me on the bed, his strong hard body crushing mine. He began to suck my eight-inch dick. I made some erotic whimpering sounds as his tongue slid up and down tasting my modest dick
We spent some hours kissing, caressing, and playfully biting each others' lips.
“Fuck me in the ass, sweet boy. Have your way with me.” He ordered me in a harsh but sexy tone.
I did what I was told and I slid my cock into his firm bronzed buttocks. He grunted and groaned like a pig.
“Make me your bitch, sweet boy.” He said breathlessly during it.
I let him have it all right and we were like animals. I had him lay on the bed while I played with his cock. He made grunting sounds and talked dirty during it. When his milky-white cum oozed out of his dick, I licked it up like a dog.
We laid on the bed without talking, only embracing each other. He stroked my hair as I kissed him softly on the lips and chest. It was amazing, and I wished we stayed like that forever. I never wanted to let go of this man. We just laid down and enjoyed each others' company.
“I have to leave you now.” he said in a sorrowful voice.
“Please stay, I don't want to lose you.”
“You never will, my sweet boy. I'll always be with you, wherever you go and I will always see you at night.”
We had some more rounds of kissing and fucking. He was all over me as I felt every kiss he planted on my body....
When the damn alarm clock woke me up, I flung it against the wall. I enjoyed being with him in my bed. He helped to make my life less lonely. Even after I woke up, and took a shower, I could still feel his hard dick plowing my ass until my butt got tight. I got dressed and headed to the coffee shop around the corner from my apartment, where I had a latte and a cinnamon roll. When I finished it up, I went for a quick jog around the park. I was so absorbed with that amazing dream that I collided with another guy jogging in the opposite direction. After I told him I was sorry, he said it was no problem. When I had a good look at the guy, I could hardly believe my eyes. The same short brown hair, the deep piercing blue eyes, that godlike body, and even that same alluring smile. He was my dream guy. After he told me his name was Jake, I said mine was Steve.
“You want to come up to my place where we can hang out?” he asked.
Submitted: March 06, 2015
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Hey there! Just wanted to say that for ur first time, it's pretty good! Since i'ts supposed to be a dream, the fast pace is good.
I just wanted to point out that u made a couple of grammar mistakes
There ahould be a comma between man meat and sweet boy.
Instead of fucked me it shoulf be fuck me
There shluld be commas between: bitch and sweet boy, stay and I dont want to, will and my, shower and could, apartment and where.
Also, i think that instead of awesome u should use another word like amazing. It gives him a better image, you know?
Theres a line that says : " i stroked my hair" i think u ment he?
One last thing and ill stop annoying u XD after the lart with the alarmclock. It says: "and flunged it". I thing you forgot the I.
I lersonally did enjoy the reading. Good job and keep working hard! In time you will improve even further :)
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Thank you for the comment and the advice on the grammar mistakes. I know I have trouble with my grammar when writing. Your advice is very welcome and I'll certainly correct the mistakes. Again I thank you and if you liked this story you might want to check out the one I wrote call A Date with Death. I would be very interested in what you think of that one and could you offer me any comments and share what you think of it.
Wed, March 11th, 2015 10:28am
HI love. Here are your mistakes :)
* when I got undressed, and turned out the lights,
*Soon, I escaped from the cold, harsh, reality of living a single life in a cheap apartment near downtown Denver. Everything was still and quiet in the inky blackness (Though it think it would sound better if it was darkness) of the night.
*When the door opened softly, I sat up in bed it was some creep who wanted something. I watched the tall dark outline, standing in the doorway, until i turned on the lamp by my bed to see who it was.
* I confess I was scared, but my curiosity was strangely aroused by the presence of this amazing, hot, sexy stranger.
*He was tall, about six feet tall, broad-shouldered with dark blue, piercing, eyes, like the sea.
*bushy crotch and a long, slightly hairy, uncut cock.
*(I think he would have a bigger aura of superiority if you described him as amazing Greek god instead of amazing)
*he came closer to me, and caressed my head with his strong hand. I felt it move behind my head as he drew me closer to his monster-sized dick.
*I was afraid, and rather intimidated, but I...
*My tongue curled around it, like a juicy hot slim jim that i get at the n...
*"Go ahead. Savor that man meat, sweet boy" he said to me in a husky voice.
*the more i had it in my mouth, the more I loved it.
*He then told me to bend over and slid that monster cock into my tight hole.
*I was feeling all wet with the sweat all over my body.
*He laid on top of me on the bed, his strong hard body crushing mine.
*He began to suck my eight-inch dick.
*I made some erotic whimpering sounds as his tongue slid up and down tasting my modest dick.
*"fuck me in the ass, sweet boy. have your way with me" he ordered me in a harsh but sexy tone.
*"make me your bitch, sweet boy." He said breathlessly.
* during it. When his milky- white cum oozed out of his dick, i licked it up like a dog.
*We laid on the bed without talking, only embracing each other.(This sentence was right, but i think it sounds better this way)
*I stoked my hair and kissed him softly on the lips and chest. It was amazing, I wished we stayed like that forever.
*Please stay, I don't want to loose you."
*You never will, my sweet boy. I'll always be with you, wherever you go and I will always see you at night."
*all over me as I felt every kiss he planted on my body...
*When the damn alarm clock woke me up, I flunked it against the wall.
*(sounds better if you say something like: He helped make my life less lonely.)
*Even after I woke up, and took a shower, I could still feel his hard dick plowing my ass until my butt got tight.
* got dressed and headed to the coffee shop around the corner from my apartment, where I had a latte and a cinnamon roll.
* When I finished it up, I went for a quick jog around the park.
*After I told him I was sorry, he said it was no problem.
*When I had a good look at the guy, i could hardly believe it.
*Same short brown hair, those piercing blue eyes, that godlike body, and even that same alluring smile.
*He was my dream guy ( You can't say 'it' or 'that' when talking about a person)
*After he told me his name was Jake, i said mine was Steve.
Okay, baby! Those are all the mistakes I found! I'll re correct the other one tomorrow because here, where I live, it's almost 1 AM. Is there anything else you would like for me to go over? By the way, if you have notepad on your computer, you can send them to me. I will be able to open them. Have a nice day and I'll try to correct the other one as soon as i can
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Thank you so much for the help on this story. I corrected the mistakes and will put it back on the webpage so you can see that I got everything correct. Look forward to what you have to say on the other story tomorrow. Thanks again and by the way you seem to have a real passionate and sweet nature. I like it when you call me love or baby. That's makes a huge difference to someone trying to write erotica for the first time.
Fri, March 20th, 2015 5:28pm
Hi baby! Okay so I'm having a break now so I had the chance to check your story out before I have lunch and then drown in work. (I might be a procrastinator.. might)
okay so here are the mistakes that need fixing:
*escaped -- since hes telling you the story that already happened, it should be in past tense
*i sat up in bed it was some creep -- You forgot to write 'afraid'
*He tore off his T-shirt, making my mouth water as i lustfully gazed at his moderately hairy, hard rock, chiseled chest.
* On his pecs, he had pierced nipples while on the lower right side of his massive body, he had a tattoo of a heart in flames.
*(I think the expression is from head to toe)
*You can say "it was incredible" instead, but your choice.
*I licked it up like a dog.
*When the damn alarm clock woke me up, I flung it against the wall.
After you correct them it will be mistake-free! (or I'm missing something... I hope not.) Anyways! I hope your friend enjoys the reading as much as I did. If you need anything just message me, okay baby?
oh! I want to ask you for a favor... I'm shy about asking anyone else. So my I finally convinced my friend to upload his story here, do you mind checking it out and tell him what you thing? Even if you don't like it you can tell him, he's completely opened toward negative criticism. Please, I really want him to appreciate his writing more and I think he'll only do that through feedback. His story is called INK(no cover cause the idiot forgot), you'll be doing me a great favor.
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It's cool don't worry about it. I want to thank you again for all of your help and patience in helping me with these stories. I corrected the mistakes on this one and posted it again on the webpage. I would love to check out your friend's story for you. I feel honored and touched that you thought of me. I wouldn't mind helping out a fellow writer after all of the much appreciated and welcomed assistance on your part. Thanks a lot and hope to hear from you again, sweetheart.
Mon, March 23rd, 2015 1:40pm
For your first time writing erotica, gay or not, you hit it out of the ballpark!!! I see where others offered you suggestions and, obviously, you made them because this read great! Good job!
Sat, April 11th, 2015 6:35pm
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Thank you very much for the compliment. I wrote this story as a literary challenge to myself if I could ever write an erotica story (gay or straight) and not sound too cheesy, lame, or rehashing something that is already used in the past. After publishing this story and getting some nice feedback I decided to write the sequel to this story which I saw you already read. The funny thing is that I'm a guy and yet was able to create two seemingly arousing gay erotic stories. I was also kind of inspired to write these stories by all of the hype surrounding the film version of 50 Shades of Gray (which by the way I plan to watch it on DVD when it is available to rent). I appreciate your comments and hopefully read some of your stories. Thanks.
Sat, April 11th, 2015 3:20pm
Just keep writing and posting. I am going to fan you, but please leave a comment on my profile page that you posted another story/chapter. I love reading great writing! Also, feel free to contact me by email (on my profile page) if you have any questions. I am a female and not gay, but who the hell cares. I know great writing when I read it.
Sat, April 11th, 2015 11:46pm
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I'm glad that you are one of my fans and you're right who the hell cares whether you are gay, straight, man, or woman the point is that we love to write and that's all that matters. When I do write another story I will certainly leave a comment on your profile page. Thanks again for the encouraging words
Sun, April 12th, 2015 12:39pm
Interesting, really enjoyed it
Mon, April 27th, 2015 8:13pm
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Glad you enjoyed it. Was there anything in particular about this story that struck you? If you like this story you should probably check out "A Date with Death" which is a sort of sequel to As I Sleep I Dream. I hope you do check out the story and I'll be interested in what you have to say on that story.
Tue, April 28th, 2015 7:21am
another hot Denver story. I knew I loved this city for a reason.
Fri, November 13th, 2015 7:04pm
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Thank you for the compliment. I could have set the story someplace else like New York or California but I thought why not set it in my hometown. After all I'm sure there are some dark kinky sex going on in certain parts of Colorado. I'm glad you liked it and I hope you check out some of my other erotica stories in particular "A Date with Death", "The Exhibition", and "Sexual Conflict". Thanks again.
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Thank you very much. Like I said this is my first time writing erotica especially gay erotica. I appreciate your comments
Fri, March 6th, 2015 11:10pm