love is not

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Status: In Progress  |  Genre: Adult Romance  |  House: Booksiesilk Classic Group


Love is not, Very hot. It turns and it twists, Till you're lost in a mist. Give me the heat, A momentary meet. Passion so strong, No right or wrong. Wanting it all, Whatever the call. I'll never say stop, Keeping it top. Feeling so high, You're my kind of guy.


Submitted: October 02, 2020

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VanillaEssence

a nicely written home truth.

Fri, October 2nd, 2020 11:07pm

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Thanks for the reads and comments! Poetry is something I mess around with every so often, not my expertise at all.

Sat, October 3rd, 2020 4:38pm

DampKitten

Holy hell, I just love it! What a theme!
So, this is going to sound crazy, but poetry should have an aesthetic quality to its presentation. Classic works by the masters were always neatly packaged into four line stanzas while contemporary poets challenged the concepts of spacing. Look at EE Cummings, for example.

In any case, the content here is amazing. The topography may need adjustment. That being said, don't assume I'm suggesting you organize your piece to have each rhyme at the end of each line for emphasis. What I will say is that the paragraph format is disproportionate to the short length of the piece. You need to shorten your lines considerably. Add some spacing. Play around with the appearance.

This is really good! And I love short pieces with an impact!

Fri, October 2nd, 2020 11:21pm

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Thanks Meg!

I think it is the editor on here, because when I wrote it originally it was in the traditional four line stanzas.

Glad you enjoyed it! Poetry is not something I feel that confident with, but I like pushing myself out of my comfort zone.

Hope all is good with you x

Sat, October 3rd, 2020 4:40pm

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