SHOPPER’S DELIGHT………
WRITTEN BY MOONGLOW AND BENAWRITER
Crystal
Another boring day at work! Why the hell did I decide to work here? Oh yea, cause my family throw a fit, and flipped out when I told them I got a job at Priscilla’s. I mean come on, there’s not a better job out there then selling sex toys, etc.
So I relented and got a job in a department store. At least I get to work in the Lingerie department. But it’s not quite as exciting as I hoped it would be. Mainly girls come in. Yea, I’m a Bisexual, but I prefer a perfectly nice cock over a wet snatch.
So I’m going through the racks, straightening the clothes, regretting not taking the other job. Hey it was a thirty percent discount, and I love my adult toys. when I see a couple walk in. This happens sometimes. The girl wants to know what her guy thinks, but this guy doesn’t look like he’s up for the task with the sour look on his face.
But Hot Damn, he’s cute as hell!
“Hello guys, welcome, if there’s anything I can help you with please don’t hesitate to ask, my name is Crystal” I say, darting my eyes between the two of them, trying not to let my eye’s linger on the hot guy for too long.
“Yea no, we got it,” the girls says all snobby.
Damn I hate snobby bitches!
Ben
If there is one thing I can't stand, it's hanging around a lingerie department while my girl friend tries to decide how to waste my money. Nothing she will buy is gonna make me want her much longer; she's such a selfish bitch I can hardly wait until I piss her off enough to dump me. I would dump her ass in a heartbeat, but she's my sister's best friend, so I have to be careful how I get rid of her.
I don't mind being in this department; sometimes a girl will come out of the dressing room in something hot and it makes the wait worth while. Usually the sales clerk is some old woman who needs more help than she's gonna find here. But today I notice the sales clerk is actually hot; a blond with a great body.
I could make myself hard if I believed that her darting looks my way were on purpose. My girlfriend, Darla, wanders around aimlessly for a while and the clerk disappears. I wander closer to the sales desk, away from Darla, and find that one soft chair that they plant just for guys like me to have to wait for our woman.
Just as I get comfortable, I hear the swish that I recognize so well; silk covered legs lightly brushing against each other. The sales clerk comes out and walks by me and I have to grab my crotch. She's like a vamp, wearing dark high heels, black thigh high stockings, black lace panties and matching bra. Her hair falls just past her shoulders as she steps up on the platform in front of the three way mirror.
Yes, dammit, she IS looking at me over her shoulder! My eyes drop and I feel like they're actually grabbing her perfect buttocks. Then my bubble is burst when my girlfriend taps me on the shoulder. "Get your tongue back in your mouth, Ben!"
Crystal
I notice I caught the guy’s attention, just like I thought I would. Men are such horndogs, and I love it! It makes my job soo more interesting, to tease the men that come in. They probably appreciate it too, since you know damn well, most of them don’t want to be here in the first place. Why not try to make their visit enjoyable.
I keep darting glances his way, and staring at him through the mirror. Yep, he’s checking me out, he’s salivating. I’ve got his full attention, he can’t keep his eyes off of me. I grin to myself. Right where I want him, well, almost!
I’d rather be sucking his dick, or him having his face buried in wet pussy!
I’ve never done anything, but flirt with the guys in here. But as I see the tent rides up at the crotch of his trousers, I lick my lips. As far as I can tell through his pants he’s not too small or too big. He looks to be perfect.
Maybe something could happen, if that bitch wasn’t here that he’s with. I start to run my hands down my abdomen when miss. Bitch approaches her man. He doesn’t even notice her till she taps him on the shoulder. I hear her tell him to put his tongue back in his mouth, and she calls him Ben. So Mr. Sexy has a name.
I wonder if I could entice him to come in one of the dressing rooms with me. I’ve never done anything so naughty, such as have public sex, especially with a girlfriend nearby.
Hell, if I had to fuck her or eat her out to get a hold of his rock hard cock, I would do it. But just maybe I can get him all to myself, I think, as I run my hands up my thighs, over my stockings, imagining that it’s Ben’s hands. I feel a gush of wetness escape my aching flower between my legs. I guess I’ll have to buy this outfit, but it’s worth it, to see the look on his face right now.
Ben
I sit there, hoping Darla doesn't see my hand squeezing my cock through my pants.
"I've got three bras, three sets of panties and three lingerie pieces I'm going to try on so I'll be a while," she says. "Are you going to be okay waiting?"
"Sure, but if I'm not here when you come out, call my cell phone; I might wander around the store myself." I answer.
Darla had no more than disappeared into the dressing room area when the sales girl stepped down off the platform and came my way. She stopped in front me and asked, "What do you think?" and twirled around in a circle.
"That's pretty hot!" I admitted, swallowing. She turned around with her back to me and bent over. That perfect ass was just inches in front of my face. "Do you think it's too tight back there?" she asked over her shoulder.
I'm thinking to myself - "if she means her ass, I'm sure it's not too tight for what I'd like to stick in there," but I answered as carefully as I could, "No...no, it's....it's just perfect."
She noticed my hand holding the bulge in my pants.
"Are you okay?" she asked, "you look a little flushed."
"It's kinda warm in here," I answered.
"There's a water fountain in the back of the dressing room area; follow me," she said. I got up and followed her, mesmerized by her legs and ass as she walked. She grinned at me over her shoulder and she knew I was hooked. When she pointed out the water fountain against the back wall, I bent over to get a drink, and suddenly I felt her hands between my legs grabbing my erection and my balls at the same time.
I didn't know what to do so I held still and let her drive me crazy for a couple minutes.
Crystal
Damn, I wasn’t wrong. He does have a nice package, I think has I massage his dick and balls through his pants. I can feel his penis grow even bigger and harder under my assaulting hands.
I can’t seem to help myself. I bring my hands up to his waistband, and undue his pants. I slip my hand down his boxers, and get a firm grip on his pulsating shaft.
“Follow me,” I whisper in his ear from behind, before giving the rim of his ear a lick.
I lead him by his erect member deeper into the store. We go through a door that says employees only. Boy am I glad I’m the only working in this department today.
Ben doesn’t say a word until we get to the employees lounge.
“Have a seat at the table, but pull the chair out, I thought I just would make your wait a little bit more bearable,” I purr, as I get down on my knees in between his parted legs.
“So you know my name, what’s yours?” He asks me, as he pinches my erect nipples through my see through fabric.
“Hmm, you must like what you see,” I say seductively. I see his eyes are full of lust.
“I love what I see, name,” he demands.
“Crystal, but some people call me Moon,” I say as I pull his pants down a little bit.
Ben helps me by lifting his ass up off the chair a little. I pull out his cock, and whistle. “Mama likes!” I say with real feeling, as his cock springs out to play.
I run my tongue along the rim of his pink head, watching the pre-cum ooze out his tiny slit. I couldn’t help it my tongue darted across his mushroom head to lick up the salty treat that was calling me name.
I suck it hard into my mouth, stopping right under his rim, twirling my tongue all over the tip of his manly flesh. He makes a little groan. I drop my mouth down his entire length, making sure to engulf his whole cock in my moist mouth, my nose touching his skin.
“Oh Fuck, Crystal,” he exclaims.
I giggle, and the vibrations make him moan quite loudly, and he thrusts his hands into my long blond hair, as he bucks his hips, making me gag a little at his sudden thrust into my warm mouth.
Then I get down to business, or should I say pleasure. I bob my head up and down his shaft, swirling my tongue around and around has I suck. It doesn’t take long, his hands tighten in my hair, almost to the point of pain.
Ben cum’s in my mouth with a shout. I make sure to swallow every drop, and keep sucking, milking his cock for everything it’s got for me.
Then I rub the front of my body up the front of his like a cat. I give him a peck on the lips.
“So what are you gonna do to me now big boy,” I purr. Hoping like hell Darla didn’t hear him shout. I don’t want our time together to be cut short.
Ben
My balls were screaming as she milked my cock with her mouth, and I was thinking "This woman could give lessons on how to really give a blow job." She didn't need to use her hands; she knew exactly what to do with her mouth to get me hard and want to empty my load into her mouth. I wanted something else, but she made it feel so good that I just couldn't bring myself to stop her.
Then she teases me even more, and I know she's not satisfied with just a taste of me. I figure Darla will be roaming the store sooner or later, looking for me, but she won't know where to look.
Taking Crystal by the shoulders, I stand up and turn her around. It's a good thing the store isn't crowded; she knew exactly how to weave in and around clothing racks to take us to the employee lounge without us being seen. It also helped that I didn't have to take much time to undress her since she was still in the lingerie. I bend her over and she put her hands on the seat of the chair.
I drop my pants and boxers down to my ankles pull them off over my shoes. I figure if we're gonna get caught, I might as well do it right. Grabbing her hips I slide my erection between her thighs and lean over her back, so I can whisper in her ear:
"I really wanted to get my face in your pussy, but I think you need this more than my tongue right now. Come on; work it, show me what you really want."
I press the tip of my cock against her slit and rub it up and down until she takes the initiative to impale herself on my shaft. As she backs up against me, I slap her on the ass nice and hard and she moans. Leaning forward again, I slide a hand around so I can tease her clit with my fingers as she bucks against me.
I want to drive her crazy and make her want to scream when she comes. I whisper to her again as my fingers flip across her clit and my cock slams into her core, "If you can come before I do, I'll show you what I can do with MY mouth." Grabbing her hair with my other hand, I meet her bumps with hard, deep thrusts.
Crystal
“Oh Hell yes, Fuck my cunt hard Ben,” I plead in between moans. Louder then I should probably be, but at this point, I couldn’t give a flying fuck. Every time he slams into me, I feel his balls slap my ass, and it just increases my pleasure. Ben’s making me buck up against him like a fucking wild horse, with his magic fingers on my clit. His cock feels so amazing! My little bare love hole fits him like a perfectly fitted glove, and to think, I almost called in today.
At this rate, it won’t take me long to cum. As I’m bucking up against his shaft, Ben slaps my ass again, and you can hear it echo through the room, over my whimper. The wetness from my sloppy pussy that Ben’s diving into is loud and clear throughout the room. Even over his grunting and my moaning.
He pulls my hair harder, making me turn my head to the side, and he invades my mouth with his tongue, giving me a hard demanding kiss. Then he jerks my hair more, so my creamy neck is at his disposable.
Ben starts nibbling on my neck, as his wonderful fingers amp up. Then he bites the hell out of my shoulder, pushing me over the edge. Damn I hope he doesn’t leave a bruise for my boyfriend to find.
I scream my pleasure to the heavens, “yes Ben, yes Ben, just like that!” He most of known I needed it a little rough.
I stiffen for a couple seconds. Than convulse like I’m having a seizure. As my pussy tightens around his dick, and my orgasm races through me. God, I hope he doesn’t cum!
I finally calm down enough to say,”didn’t you say you could do something with your mouth?” I grin.
“ I want to see if it’s as good as you cock!”
Ben
The whole idea of doing this in the employee lounge in a store while it's still open for business is exciting enough, but Crystal is tearing my ass up, in more ways than one. I can still taste her skin and I'm only a few strokes away from losing my load as she starts jerking her body and her pussy grips my shaft like a vise. Holding her hips as she comes, I wait for her to finish so I can plunge deep and fill her up.
But then she turns her head toward me, shaking her hair away from her face and reminded me of what I said about my mouth. Shit! Her pussy is so warm and wet and I really wanted to coat her insides with my cum. But if I'm gonna eat her out, I'd rather not have my cum inside her.
Reluctantly I pull my cock out, and her pussy is still holding tight. She's a hot fuck and I need to come back and tap her again later. She turns to the table in the lounge and hops up onto the edge of it with her ass on the edge. "Pull up a chair; your lunch is ready," she says with a big smile. Sliding the chair over to the table, I sit down on it, right between her legs.
Somewhere in the store, Darla is wandering around, probably wondering where the fuck I am. Fuck her. Crystal has my undivided attention and I'm gonna do whatever she wants.
She's so wet that her juices are seeping from her, so I lean in and lap at her bare pussy lips and then up her slit. As I drive my tongue into her, she grabs my head with both hands and wraps her legs around my head, her heels crossed on my back. My nose dips into her pussy as I lick her juices from in between her crack back up to her slit. She actually tastes pretty sexy, so I put my lips inside her and suck up her juices and she moans, "That's it, eat my cunt, Ben!"
Just the smell and taste of her is enough to keep me on the edge, my cock oozing precum, aching to let go. She lays back on the table and I reach up sliding my hands under her bra and start pinching her nipples. Her fingers dig into my scalp and she pulls me harder against her.
"My clit, Ben, get my clit," she moans in desperation.
Crystal
Oh man, Oh man, what’s this guy a sex god? He eats pussy like it’s his favorite dessert! Ben inserts two fingers into my wet snatch, and attacks my clit with his tongue.
“Oh yea baby work that juicy pussy,” I yell, enjoying myself way to much! I hump his face like a mad woman, holding his hair tighter, because it just feels so damn good!He doesn’t seem to mind. He picks up his pace finger fucking me, and he circles my clit with his moist tongue.
“Don’t tease Ben, I need to cum, make me cum,” I groan out begging. He chuckles, and nibbles on my hood. All I can manage to do is whimper at the sensations racing through my body, and buck my hips up to try and hump his face.He takes his other hand, and pins my hips to the table, and wiggles his tongue rapidly over my engorged love button.
“Oh fuck, I’m gonna cum, don’t stop!” I demand, yelling again. I don’t care if anyone hears me anymore, I just want to cream his face.
My orgasm hits full force. I can’t remember the last time I came this hard from getting ate out. I’m seeing fucking stars. My legs tighten around his head, and my hands hold him buried in my cunt. As I tremble and gush pussy juice all over Ben’s face. I can feel him licking through my slit and in my hole to capture all my sweet cream up.
Finally I come down from my orgasmic high. Laying back on the table, very sated, letting go with my legs and hands. Ben gulps in a few mouthfuls of air. After all that, I hope I can make Ben cum hard too.
Ben
Nothing gets me ramped up like having a wet pussy attacking my face. Her cum tastes so sweet I could eat it with a spoon. Her legs squeezing my head nearly make me lose it, so as soon as she calms down from her orgasm, I stand up and plow my cock into her as deep as I can go.
I grab her ankles in my hands and pull her legs up in the air and pull them together against my chest. She's so tight, but wet and she moans, so it must feel good for her too. I slide my hands down to the outside of her thighs and hold her as I buck in and out of her. She is so wet that my cock slapping into her can probably be heard outside the lounge. Fuck it; I need to come and her pussy is sucking me on every stroke.
"Fuck my cunt, Ben, fill me with your cum," she moans, her hands slipping down to hold on to my wrists. Fuck! Dirty talk tears me up and I know I'm gonna blow any second. I'm so hot I just want to do something dirty, something nasty, so I pull out quickly. She tilts her head up to look at me. "What the...?" she asks.
"Stand down on the floor and on the table," I tell her. She reluctantly slides off the table, turns around and leans over on it. Crouching down I pull her buttocks apart with my hands and slide my wet cock in the crease of her ass. Then I let those warm soft globes caress my cock as I move it slowly up and down her crease. "Oh, yeah, come in my ass," she moans.
Bingo! She's good at picking up on my hot spots. As if on command, my cock spews my load. Sliding my cock up and down her crack, I spread my cum in there from top to bottom. The heat of her ass is amazing and my cock feels so good and hard.
I look down, watching my cum bubbling at the top of the crease of her ass and I hear a faint voice as it passes by the lounge door, "Ben! Where are you? I'm done shopping!" Fuck my ex-girlfriend. I'm hot for Crystal now.
Crystal
I hear that bitch calling out for Ben. Fuck her! I turn around, and get on my knees in front of Ben. I grab his ass and pull him towards me. I lick at his softening cock, cleaning our cum off his member. I even squeeze the head of his cock to get the last drop of cum out of his tiny slit. My tongue greedily licks it up.
Ben jerks away from me, and I laugh. Knowing the head of his shaft has to be sensitive as hell now. I walk over to the break run counter and grab some paper towels to clean myself off.
Throwing the paper towels in the trash can, I say, “ I guess I have a customer ready to check out.” I say with a pout. Then smirk licking my lips at the tasty treat I just got.
“Hold on,” I demand, as he starts to put his clothes back in order.
“What? Why?” Ben says in frustration.
I walk back over to the counter, tarand open a drawer, pulling out a black magic marker. I make my way back over to Ben, and push him down on one of the tables. I kneel back down in front him, and engulf his flaccid dick into my mouth.
I suck just long enough for it to come back to life, wishing we had more time as I run my tongue up the vein of his underside cock, and circle the head of his now engorged cock again. I pull back and uncap the permanent marker. I look up at him, and grin with a mischievous look on my face.
I start at the base of his fuck stick, writing my number up the side of his dick, working my way up. I smirk knowing it’s permanent. Right then I hear his phone vibrating. We both ignore it.
“I hope I don’t have to write my name too.” I look into his eyes with suspiciousion.
“No need to worry, Crystal, I couldn’t forget your name, even if I tried.
“Ok Sweetheart, you better call me, I need to take care of your girl out there!”
Ben
The phone number written on my shaft gets smaller as I read Darla's text on my phone, "Where the fuck are you? I'm ready to pay and leave!"
I zip up and follow Crystal, to leave the employee lounge, but right outside at the nearest check out desk is Darla with her purchases! I jump back into the lounge and close the door, leaving it ajar so I can peek out. I watch as Crystal whispers something to Darla and suddenly they are both walking towards the lounge door. What the fuck? They stop right at the door and I panic and slip inside the employee restroom inside the lounge.
As they come, in Crystal continues to whisper but loud enough for me to hear, and I know she wants me to hear.
"Things are really slow today," Crystal says, "and I just fucked a guy but I'm still really horny. Enough that I'll make you a deal."
"What kind of a deal?" Darla asks.
"I'll let you sneak out of the store with your stuff if you'll have some sex with me; you know, a little girl/girl stuff."
Darla looks at Crystal for a minute and looks over her body and finally say, "Okay, I guess, but I might have to pick up a couple more things to make it worth my while."
"No problem," Crystal says. "All I ask is that we get undressed, you lie down on the table and eat me and then I'll do the same for you. You can fill your purse with panties before you leave."
Greedy Darla agrees, and suddenly they're ripping their clothes off. Crystal goes to the door and locks it as Darla climbs onto the table. I nearly drop my load as I see Crystal squatting over Darla's face; she's gonna make Darla eat my cum!
Crystal
I lower myself down on her mouth, and she immediately sticks her tongue in my love hole.
“Wow, you’re really wet,” Darla muffled from between my dripping pussy lips.
All I do is giggle. I bet Ben’s getting a good laugh out of her eating our combined cum. I bet she doesn’t swallow. Hell, she probably won’t even let him cum in her mouth to spit it out.
I rock my hips as she keeps lapping at my slit. I rotate my hips to cover her lower face with cum. I ride her chin, like it’s a small dick, so she can lick at my clit.
Ben’s watching the action from the bathroom still as he strokes his once again hard cock. He can’t decide rather to join them when they get done eating each other out. But he’s loving the show, watching Crystal’s ass buck back and forth. Darla’s got her legs open just enough where he can see her glistening honey pot. Not to mention her full tits, with their erect nipples.
“Oh yeah baby, right there,” I purr as I grind down on her chin harder, and she starts moving her tongue rapidly over my nub. She’s got just the right spot, that I feel my orgasm building.
I grab her head pressing my quivering cunt into her face hard. “Suck it now.” I yell. I cream her face as I tremble on top of her. I ride the waves out, I more my hips back up to make sure my core is over her mouth, so she’ll at least get a mouthful. Then climb off of her, thinking what cum she didn’t eat of Ben’s, must of came rushing out with my new cum. I smile.
“That’s the first time I’ve done that, it didn’t taste the way I expected it would,” Darla says.
Ben
This whole scene is incredible. I mean, Darla never mentioned that she likes eating pussy, but she didn't object a bit when Crystal suggested it. Watching Crystal sitting on Darla's face is driving me crazy. Seeing Crystal rubbing her pussy on Darla's face made me so hard, I nearly made myself come. I can see how wet Darla is, and how it's Crystal's turn to make Darla come.
Crystal gets down off the table and Darla grabs her own breasts; she must be pretty horny. Crystal sneaks a glimpse toward the bathroom door and sees me watching, and she beckons me to join. As Crystal stands between Darla's legs by the table, I quietly walk up behind Crystal.
As Crystal puts her face into Darla's pussy, she also jams two fingers into her slit, just as I slide my hard cock into Crystal's pussy from behind. She arches her back and presses back against me as I slowly pump in and out of her. After a few minutes, she moans into Darla's flesh and Darla wraps her hands in Crystal's hair.
I can feel Crystal's pussy clenching, waiting for my cum. She concentrates on Darla's clit. reluctantly I pull free from Crystal and get on my knees behind her. I spread her cheeks with my hands and send my tongue into her dark valley. I lick up and down across her tight hole for a while, then, dip two fingers into her pussy and wipe her wetness across her tight rim.
Then standing up again I hold one cheek aside and watch as I press the tip of my cock slowly into her puckered rim. Carefully I inch it in to allow her to adjust and when I am balls deep, I reach under her and begin rubbing her clit with my cock embedded deep inside her ass.
Crystal
I can’t believe how epic it feels to have Ben’s cock buried in my ass. I don’t do this often, but maybe I should do it more if it’s gonna feel this incredible. I’m so ecstatic that Ben listen and joined us.
I don’t think Darla has even noticed. After I finger fuck Darla for a couple of minutes, I spread her labia lips open, and dig my tongue in her core, wiggling my talented tongue as deep as I can get it.
So no, I don’t think she’s noticed him. Her eyes are tightly closed, and she’s moaning like a two dollar whore. I push back against Ben, demanding for him to move that lovely cock, in and out of my ass. His fingers feel amazing on my clit, but I need his engorged dick to move.
“Oh Fuck Yes,” I mumble into Darla’s pussy as Ben gets the hint and slowly withdrawals from my back door, and slams back into my asshole.
Darla must think I’m talking about her wet, sweet smelling cunt (tasty too) because she says,” yea Baby, you like eating that pussy don’t you?”
“Hmmm,” is all the response I give from her snatch.
Ben pounds into my bum again and again. You would think Darla would feel the force of him slamming into me, but she must be lost in her own ecstasy. I’m getting so close to my release with Ben rubbing my love button just right. I decide I better get Darla off, before I lose it.
I lick up her saucy slit to her love button. I drive two fingers back into her wet flower, and tongue the hell out of her engorged clit. Making sure to hit just the right spot inside her little hood. That’s all it took. Her legs start to tremble and she cries out, holding on to her breast now.
I did it just in time, because my climax slams into me just as I feel Ben lose it too. I stand up and reach behind me, and wrap my arms around his neck, to keep from falling. My legs are like jello. Hell, I’m shaking like jello with the force of my orgasm racing through me. Ben’s cock jerks and squirts inside my ass, as he stays buried in there, grunting in my ear.
Ben
Crystal's ass is incredibly tight and I'm shoving my cock in and out of her as deep as I can. I can't believe she can take the entire shaft so easily. She starts shaking and I feel her body convulse as Darla moans out loud lying in the table. It seems all three of us came at the same time as I unload into Crystal's ass.
I'm groaning into Crystal's ear because it feels so fucking good and suddenly Darla lifts up on to her elbows and sees me behind Crystal. "What the fuck?" she yells. I practically have to yank my cock free because her ass is so tight. Darla looks at me and says, "I didn't know you liked threesomes!"
"You never asked!" I reply. Stupid bitch thinks her pussy is the only one I'd eat or fuck.
I turn Crystal around and hug her warmly. "Damn! You're so hot, Crystal; thanks for a really great shopping experience!" and we both laugh. As we all put our clothes back in order, Crystal whispers to me, "The next time you're wanking yourself, remember to look down at your dick and call me."
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Fuck. Fuck, Fuck.
Ben, what did you do to luck out like that.
Crystal, I want to know where that store is.
My memory isn't too good with phone numbers so I'll bring my marker with me.
You two make a fantastic writing pair. I don't know wich of your writing in this story I like better.
The whole thing is SFH
That means So Fucking Hot if you don't know.
Now where's those panties I keep around when I need them. I've got something that just popped up that I need to use them on. :-))
xoxoxoSW
Thank you Ron for such a wonderful comment! i know Ben thanks you too! I enjoy writing with Ben, we both got similar dirty minds. If you haven't read them yet, me and Ben have wrote a couple of other stories together. Check them out, if you haven't already! Thanks again! kisses, Crystal
Mmmmmmm
Crystal and Ben...next time I wanna join ;)
Fuck Fuck Fuck
Seems to be a great day in Booksiesilk!
What an awesomely, thrilling price of literature. I'm shelving this for another read later!
Thank you very much for reading, commenting, and shelving! Me and Ben have some other stories we co-wrote together, check them out. I also hope you can check out some of my other writings, and tell me what you think. I'll come by your profile soon and see what you got!
If heard whispers of you two creating a story and then you confirmed it for me yday. I was so excited as the two of you never fail to push the correct buttons. You hit the spot with this one. Even the pictures had me open mouthed. Amazing hun
I'm so glad you enjoy our writing! We come close to scraping this, and writing something else. I'm glad we didn't now. I figured the guys especially would love the picture! Sorry it's a little grainy, but it's a real pic not an image from the internet. I always enjoy hearing from you! Thanks drama queen!
That was beyond delicious. Not sure what else I can say, it was just so hot!! Nicely done:)
That was totally incredible! Wish we had assistants like Moon around here! Amazing.
You probably do have assistants like that around where you're at! You just got to know where to look for them, or find them. Go into a place and flirt a little and see what happens! ;););)
If something happens you totally got to tell me about it, or write a story about it. I had something happen recently, that I've told a few people, and some of them said I should definitely make a story out of it.
Anyway, love hearing from you, and thank you for your kind comment and shelving this!
Moon! Friends like you keep me going here! I love the way you encourage us! I have sent you a personal message! I am so glad i came here! i have met some beautiful people in this world!
wow super hot!!, the two of you so creative, ;)
Wow, great story. I loved how we got to see it in Ben and Crystal's eyes :) Have you and benawriter done some other collaborations?
Amie xo
Thank you Hun! Me and Ben have done a couple of other stories together. I think three others. The first one we did, he started the story and I finished it. The others we passed the story back and forth, so you'd see the story from both POV though out the whole story. I also done one story with Laura Lewis like this. Hope you check them out, and the story's I wrote by myself, and tell me what you think? Also Ben and Laura they read the comments too. Thanks again for taking the time to come by and comment!
First I looked at this story and I thought, "why so long" then I started reading and reading and reading and I didn't want it to finish. Oh fuck this was hot. You two are the queen and king of erotic writing in BS. This was exquisite.
Ben thought the story was too short after the first encounter, and suggested scrapping it. I'm glad now we just made it longer instead of scrapping it. It just didn't seem like enough after the first sexual encounter,so we added in the girl on girl and the threesome.
Thank you so much for your really kind comment!!!!
Holy Shit!!! Where do I start with this??? First thing is that I love the story line. I love the concept and I love the way both you and Ben work your way thru it. You've perfected the back and forth perspective technique on these stories, and I really prefer it done this way where you know exactly who is talking rather than melding it together. Don't ask me why, I just like it like this.
Moon, you always talk about your goal to perfectly combine story and dialogue with that incredibly hot explicit sex you're known for, and you really achieved that here with ball draining precision! I mean damn, girl! Ben had to be cleaning himself off between paragraphs with this shit bouncing back and forth in cyberspace! A lot of people don't realize how difficult it is to mix these ingredients the way both of you do...description of circumstance, setting the scene, then spoon in a little dialogue, then tell us what you're thinking. It's beautifully blended into the most delicious and creamy batter ever!! Makes me want to lick the bowl, I swear!
Moon, your girl on girl scenes are killer! Ben, as always, your literary style and imagination totally kick ass! You two are like a WWF wrestling team that makes me want to drape myself over the ropes in y'all's corner and surrender myself to the beating of a lifetime!!!
Mega I always love hearing from you. You're so encouraging, and it makes me want to write more. When I'm writing with someone else I prefer to write it this way. I think it makes the story better and more interesting. It's a little harder to write because you have no idea what the other writers gonna write on their turn till you get it back and you have to play off that. So the story can go in any direction.
Me and Ben started doing our stories this way on our 2nd story we wrote together to try something different instead of each of us writing half, and now i'm glad we decided to try it.
Thank you so much for your kind comments! Like I said before, they're so encouraging!
Love you girl, Crystal
This is great . Makes me wish I was in there somewhere .lol. I really enjoyed it . Thank you for sharing it with us.
Thank you for your kind comment! It looks like you're a biker from your profile pic. My husband and I also are. Well my husband is, but I do love to ride. He's looking for a bigger bike, so I can learn to drive the one he has. Which shouldn't be to hard.
I hope you check out some of my other stories, and I'm definitely gonna stop by your page and see what you got! Thanks again!
You know that moment of 'I told myself so, I told myself so, I told myself so'. I just knew it. Ben and Moon together, thats too much to handle. Your writing partnership is wonderful.
I'm a kinda shy person so conversation during sex is like a no no. Its not for lack of what to say, its just I'll die of shame so I really envy this. I love the beginning and how you got Ben's attention before going for gold.
Ben was a goner the moment he walked in that store. lol. I totally love this. You do know my number one story of yours was still written with Ben? How to turn a ticket around. I'll never forget that story. lol.
You guys are just...
Thank you, Thank you! I love hearing from you and also reading your stories! I didn't know that was your favorite story of mine and Ben's! I liked that story too!
I love writing with Ben and trying to seduce him with my words. I know we've wrote a few stories together, but we realized that we hadn't wrote one about us in it. That's how this story got started.
I hear you about the sex talk. Me personally I love it, but my husband doesn't usually do it except every once in a blue moon, usually when he's drunk,or had quite a bit to drink. I soak it up then! LOL
Anyway thank you again for stopping by and commenting!
OMG this was the best erotica collaboration I have read. You and Ben did a awesome job writing this. It was so hot that I had to "take a break"...Ben is very skilled with that tongue of his and Moon. Good Lord- Customer Service and Satisfaction you gave them both..Great read!! Thank you for the invitation. ..
Carolyn
I wanted to give the best customer service I could, and what better way to do it then satisfy their every need, especially sexually! Ben and I have wrote a few other stories on here, and I wrote one with Laura Lewis. If you haven't read them please check them out, and tell us what you think! They read all the comments on their stories too. After all they're half theirs.
Thank you so much for your comment!
One of the best things about writing erotica is getting feedback, especially positive feedback, and this hit the mark and made me smile. Proud to have worked with you again, Crystal. I enjoyed every tasty moment!
I love when writers collaborate on a story, it really showcases their talents. You two are smoking hot! I mean really hot! I am sopping mess over here! ;) What else can I say that hasn't already been said....it was AMAZING!
thank you so much! It also can be real fun when writers collaborate on a story! You have no idea how it's gonna turn out till the end. Each writer puts their own twist in, and you work off that when it's your turn to write. Makes things interesting! Thank you for the kind comment!
This story is crazy good...you and Ben are very creative together...I have to get some time so I can read some of your other work...thanks for your comments on my story...hope u can continue to read my work...
Darla who? Ben got the treat of a lifetime, & all I got was (stroke) THE SHAFT!!! You guys got so carried away with all the joyously presented romp in the hay, that a few grammatical, & strange errors jumped in to try to distract the readers, but nothing could tear our brains away from your hot little escapades!!! Once again, lucky guy that Ben... Back doors action has never been so vividly arousing!
Fabulous! What a hoot! I loved every minute - it sounds like you did too! You are a fine team when it comes to the really naughty stuff. But, damn, I am so jealous of Ben's superhuman recovery times....ah, to be young again!
Great work - great fun. FF xx(for Moon) no kisses for you, Ben, too jealous!
;)::0 i got the kisses!!!! I really did enjoy writing this story! It definitely turned me on while I was writing my part, and reading Ben's parts!.
i think awhile back I promised you a story, after you wrote that amazing story for me, but than you went away :(....Now that you are back, I wonder!!!
Thank you sweet heart for your kind comment!
That was so fucking hot. I've never witnessed a store clerk that seductive and hot, but I loved your imagination. Sorry i'm late on reading this. I was in the hospital for a week, but i was thinking about you guys here on booksiesilk.
xoxoxo princess.
Snapey