Some difference

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Adult Romance  |  House: Booksiesilk Classic Group

He was all she ever wanted,

she was another one on his list,

he was her North and guide,

she was just a stop on his way,

he was her dear beloved,

she was some accepted supply,

he was her joy and desire,

she was just an object he owned.

And so, he stopped talking to her,

she never stopped asking why.

He just gave elegant excuses,

and all of a sudden she saw it all.

She said ok and  so long,

she left without another word.

She never talked to him again,

to this day he is surprised,

she was supposed to plea and beg.

she is out of his life forever,

never to be trodden upon again.


Submitted: March 10, 2021

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Amy F. Turner

The contrast of this uneven relationship is so relatable. Sometimes it isn't until something is lost that the other person realized what they had, but by the time they do the other has moved on. Beautiful tragedy relayed in so few words.

Sat, March 13th, 2021 8:36am


Thank you.It was a tragedy.
Love, Lizzie.

Sun, March 14th, 2021 9:04am


You ever heard the song, "Lose Somebody" by Kygo and One Republic? Take a listen, in reference to your piece.

Amy's review is perfect. I like something subtle about this poem that's easily overlooked. It has to do with POV. You use third person omniscient to describe something that's clearly personal to the speaker. You could have chosen first person, but you didn't - and I think that's very significant. When you use 3rd person in any literary piece, it creates 'distance'. The fact that you defer 1st person for 3rd here is a quiet emphasis on the distance (and ultimate abandonment) of love in the latter part of the poem.

The other point is that most of us want to believe true love is something that has to be shared when in fact, as you point out so delicately, we can love someone who doesn't love us back.

Sun, March 14th, 2021 2:24pm


Yes, that is true. Someone said once that "one loves and the other lets himself be loved".
Thanks for your review, dear Kitten.Love, Lizzie.

Sun, March 14th, 2021 9:09am

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