Submitted: October 17, 2020
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You gave me once the gift of lust,
of laughter in the face of time,
love wrapped in companionship
embedded in me, untarnished,
like the scent of your skin
during long nights of solitude,
of fading seconds,
of lost hours.
Just a different look slightly streamlined
I adore the simple longing in how you manifest the intensity of the reflective nature of this beautiful piece in so few words. Amazing.
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DampKitten
My favorite line "Love wrapped in companionship"
Sat, October 17th, 2020 8:10pmThe theme of this is fab...this lingering intensity, not just a simple recollection. The end of the piece is hugely important because there's a bit of exasperation implied; the loss of love in the emptiness of time. As short as this piece may be, there are still a few extra words I'd erase. I like a compact piece like this which is direct and sharp. I like succinctness.
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Thank you. I appreciate your input but it stays as written. Love,Lizzie.
Sat, October 17th, 2020 4:52pm