Forgotten woman

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Adult Romance  |  House: Booksiesilk Classic Group


The limbs of a forgotten woman

are like hands of a dead clock,

trying to turn and signal the hours

only to find stillness and silence.

Desire flows through her body,

only to find its object gone,

tears of pain and solitary climaxes

course her face erasing hope.

The body of a forgotten woman,

becomes a memory in itself,

a trodden upon, well-known territory,

owing no excuses to a fancy map.

The spirit of a forgotten woman

becomes the one that nurtures her

pushes her forward in cold nights

and teaches her old female secrets

to go on in search of her own sun.

 

 


Submitted: September 17, 2020

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DampKitten

Deep stuff! Love the repetition. That's the main poetic element here..."a forgotten woman"
Repeating a phrase this way is referred to as 'anaphora'.

"Solitary Climax" - masturbation? What an interesting description. I like that.
I think I would change "handle" to hands in the second line. I've never heard them called handles.

One thing I'll point out about metaphor and analogy in poetry is that you don't always have to use the word "like" to establish a comparison. An example would be:

A forgotten woman's limbs
are a dead clock's hands

Sat, September 19th, 2020 2:23am

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Hi, Kitten,thanks for your review. I will correct the "handles" issue now as your are right on that. Still the rest stays as I wrote it, i do not like the line "are a dead clock´s hands ",sorry about that.
Love, Lizzie.

Sat, September 19th, 2020 9:03am

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