Weighted soul

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Other  |  House: Booksiesilk Classic Group


They say a mans worth can be defined in times of need.

They say a mans revenge is defined on how much he had to bleed.

They say a mans lust is defined on his unhappiness with his wife.

They say his mistress breathes and lives his deepest desires in his life.

They say a mans love is defined through gestures of hand.

They say he is cold, full of malice, crumbling like tumbling sands.

They say a mans soul can be defined by what he leaves behind.

They say a mans life is his own and cannot be defined.


Submitted: November 05, 2020

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VanillaEssence

I can't critique this poem unless I know your gender.

Thu, November 5th, 2020 3:13am

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I’m not sure my gender is needed for an understanding of a poem written to be interpreted by the reader, thanks for the comment

Mon, November 16th, 2020 3:24pm

Amy F. Turner

Be said it so well, Hobby. They say lots of things that may or may not be true. And certainly they may weigh down any soul. Good thing for you to have a pen that may lighten the load. Lovely. You have been missed.(. ? ? ?.)

Thu, November 5th, 2020 10:24am

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Thanks Amy. As always I do appreciate your thoughts and comments.

Mon, November 16th, 2020 3:21pm

DampKitten

Who are 'they'?
Repetition is your primary poetic element regardless of gender.

The most curious line to me is
"The say a man's love is defined through gestures of hand."
In a metaphorical sense, I think that's true. Whatever he spends most of his energy and attention towards, that is his love. It doesn't have to be romantic at all....men fall in love with everything from their work to their hobbies to themselves. "Gesture of hand" implies focus. Likewise, a man's mistress may not be human...it's the thing that assumes his passion, but oddly, it may not love him back. It may simply be a safe investment for his efforts and emotion...his harbor and happy place.

I like your poem, Hobby!

Fri, November 6th, 2020 4:34am

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Thanks, your analysis is always something I joyfully read, your wording in your works is always a pleasure to read, thank you

Mon, November 16th, 2020 3:22pm

benawriter

I disagree about a man being cold and full of malice; that's an assumption that all men are that way, and we are not. However the rest of the poem rings true in many ways.

Fri, November 6th, 2020 2:05pm

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It all comes down to who “they” are really,
It’s all interpretation placed upon the reader and their thoughts and feelings that are cast. Thanks for your comments and stopping by, I appreciate your time.

Mon, November 16th, 2020 3:20pm

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