So Long

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Adult Romance  |  House: Booksiesilk Classic Group

Sometimes, all that's left to say is goodbye.

So Long


We were once a loving pair

Suddenly, had ended up with despair

You're a jerk and very unfair

Don't deny, it's your flair

Everything we had turned out as a broken fairytale

Darn! our fiction story made me pale

Your behaviour best describes you as an immature male

 Exhaustingly, I need some fresh air to inhale

Please don't get me wrong

But our relationship wasn't too strong

It's too weak, we can't go along

Now, all that's left to say is "so long".




Submitted: April 08, 2015

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Alyson Williams

Emotional! Well written. Poetry that goes right to the heart.

Wed, April 8th, 2015 1:50pm


Thank you Alyson! :) Knowing that someone appreciates my work is a great deal. I'll be posting more poems. Keep in touch. :)

Wed, April 8th, 2015 7:12am

Skinny Coutreux

Dope! Can definitely relate

Wed, April 8th, 2015 6:29pm


Wow! The feels is mutual, right? Well, that's how it is. Thanks for dropping by. You can read more poems of mine. :)

Wed, April 8th, 2015 11:34am


This was good! I can relate to it. Going to read more!

Wed, April 8th, 2015 7:21pm


Thank you! :) I look forward to be reading more comments from you as I'll be posting more poems. Keep in touch. ^_^

Wed, April 8th, 2015 6:46pm


this is great.

Wed, April 8th, 2015 7:36pm


Thank you! :)

Wed, April 8th, 2015 7:01pm


Good work.

Wed, April 8th, 2015 8:25pm


Thank you! :)

Wed, April 8th, 2015 7:02pm


Sometimes goodbye is the only way. It's hard for me to say it though, so that probably makes me a hypocrite.....good poem though.

Wed, April 8th, 2015 9:35pm


Sometimes, saying goodbye is freaking hard to do and say. But it's the only way to end up things between you and the person that doesn't give a damn. I'm glad you like the poem. Thank you. :)

Wed, April 8th, 2015 7:22pm

Touched By A Vampire

That went straight to my gut. You do extremely well in expressing yourself. I have poetry of my own if you'd like to check it out as well. It was very well written.

Wed, April 8th, 2015 9:42pm


Thank you! ^_^ I'm pleased of how you see my work. I'll be checking out your poems. :)

Wed, April 8th, 2015 7:25pm


I have a soft spot for poetry that comes from the heart and gets under my skin, and you have that talent.

Thu, April 9th, 2015 12:13am


Oh my! What else can I say but THANK YOU! I'll be posting more poems. Keep in touch. :)

Wed, April 8th, 2015 7:34pm


Nice, it says it all.

Thu, April 9th, 2015 1:09am


Yes! Thank you! ^_^

Wed, April 8th, 2015 7:35pm


URGH! I really want to be helpful, but I the only thing i can say is that i like it:C Okay, here goes my attempt (sad thing is that i love poetry, but i... i'm just bad) Well I recently came from a break up, and this is exactly how you feel. Specially when you break up because your forced to. Argh okay. Hope that helps in a way? I really do like the way you write, so please when you post something new, do tell me :) I's sorry i can't be a good critic, but i do enjoy reading your things. Just want you to know that.

Mon, April 13th, 2015 3:32pm


Oh my, Shiwang! I do appreciate you reading and commenting my stuff. Thank you! I don't know how to comfort you right now but this poem is totally intended for break up. I don't need a good critic though. I just need a sincere feedback that will lead me to know whether my piece makes sense or not. And I'm glad that you enjoyed reading my work and that you liked the way I do and write my stuff. :)

Mon, April 13th, 2015 8:47am

Emerald Skye

Very good. It's short but written so that the emotion is there. No layers of metaphors and or complicated symbolism. Your message is there, clear as day.

I love it.

Mon, April 20th, 2015 5:33am


Thank you, Emerald! I'm grateful you coming by reading and commenting! Love, flora :-)

Sun, April 19th, 2015 11:46pm


Aww, this is sad =(

Mon, April 20th, 2015 2:17pm


It is. :-( But thanks for coming by reading and commenting. :-)

Mon, April 20th, 2015 8:53am


I like it. You might hate me, but my advice is to vary the rhyming words so it will be more interesting for the readers. Well done. :)

Tue, October 6th, 2015 3:42am

jimmy valentine

Looks like you've kicked your ex's butt with this one..!! Nice one!!

Fri, January 8th, 2016 2:32pm


Commendable! Excellent! You have really invoked the feelings of a broken heart and in so little words. I salute you.

Sat, March 12th, 2016 2:13pm

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