Apple of my Eye

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Adult Romance  |  House: Booksiesilk Classic Group

Suddenly, we come to meet a person who'll make us want to take chances of falling into.

Apple of my Eye


There's this guy

So cute but a bit shy

He got eyes as wonderful as the sky

We exchanged glances

made me want to fly

His smile is as sweet like an apple pie

His presence gives me my freaking high

He got my attention

don't ask me why

He turned out to be the apple of my eye

My smile tells it all

And that I can't deny

I like him immensely



And that I cannot lie

If I'll fall  in love

maybe to him I want to try

Thus, my beating heart is all that's left to rely.





Submitted: April 10, 2015

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That's really sweet! :)

Fri, April 10th, 2015 7:50am



Fri, April 10th, 2015 12:53am


I'm really feeling poetry lately. Good job! :}

Fri, April 10th, 2015 12:32pm



Fri, April 10th, 2015 5:33am

Alyson Williams

You really have a talent here. So sweet and inspiring. You make me smile. Good job!!!

Fri, April 10th, 2015 2:12pm


Oh my! You're making me smile, too Alyson! THANK YOU! ^_^

Fri, April 10th, 2015 7:14am


It's very cute, new love is always sweet :D

Fri, April 10th, 2015 2:43pm


THANK YOU! :) I'll be posting more poems. Keep in touch. ^_^

Fri, April 10th, 2015 7:54am


Okay, since i really do suck with poetry I don't think my comment will be very helpful,but here it goes. This poem was really sweet and it really does express your feelings. I like it a lot. Good job and keep it up :)

Fri, April 10th, 2015 4:47pm


Hey Shiwang! You know what? Simply giving your feedback is a great help already. I appreciate the fact that you tried your best giving a sweet feedback about my piece. THANK YOU! :)

Fri, April 10th, 2015 9:52am

Skinny Coutreux

This is nice! I like it.

Fri, April 10th, 2015 11:32pm


THANK YOU! I'm glad to know you liked it. :)

Fri, April 10th, 2015 7:42pm

Krystal Clear

Very cleaver. Really enjoyed this.

Sat, April 11th, 2015 4:03am


I bet you mean clever? Thank you!I'm glad you enjoyed reading my piece. :)

Fri, April 10th, 2015 9:21pm


That was very touching! I like the feeling of being high and wanting to fly! Especially when it's a feeling of love.

Sun, April 12th, 2015 6:38am


THANK YOU DLCannon! :) That thing called LOVE just gives us those kind of feeling along the way and it feels so good, right? ^_^

Sat, April 11th, 2015 11:45pm


maau naman kaayo ka sa tanan mu suwat flor uip ^_^

Wed, May 6th, 2015 4:26pm


Haha :-D Thank you :-P

Thu, May 7th, 2015 5:07pm

Yyanna Lee Michaels

Very, very nice and sweet!

Fri, May 8th, 2015 4:17am


Thank you! :-)

Thu, May 7th, 2015 11:09pm


Great poem, it really brings out the feelings that went into writing it.

Mon, September 14th, 2015 10:19am


I like this one. Nice flow and rhythm. Keep it up!

Tue, October 6th, 2015 3:38am

Fleur Elizabeth

Your emotions are clearly evident by the context of your wording, and it is a pleasurable read. I could, however, connect much easily if you didn't try forcing as much of it to rhyme and instead, allowed for a more nature flow.
When writing poetry, short stories or other works, if you force your words and try to use the words that you don't fully understand or know; then, your piece can become broken. Your audience won't necessarily understand what you are saying or how to feel.
So, my recommendation, take a deep breath and relax. Look at all of the possible words you can use, and use the one word that works best for the meaning of your piece and the feelings you want your audience to experience by reading your piece.

Wed, October 7th, 2015 8:33am


Lovely work! Keep it up1

Thu, November 26th, 2015 9:15pm

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