You Will Be The Pencil I Will Be The Page

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Status: In Progress  |  Genre: General Erotica  |  House: Red Light Wives


Pencil, please color my page.
Your hue is perfect.
Your color always ageless.
Come, show me your intimate beauty.

Stay with me on the page ‘til the light fades.
Let’s dance and drink with the characters that dwell there.
Permit me to replenish your glass.
Quench yourself with a fill of my burgundy wine. 
Let us embrace so that we may wantonly engage in stimulating advances.

We’ve been one with each other virtually as two carnal minds can ever be. We have mated. We need one another like an ocean needs a river. I swallow you into my open canal as a we surge into one another and become one sea. We’ll always be connected to the carnal sea that lives inside our minds and we will fully engage one another with words of infatuation and eroticism. 

I willfully submit to the words you write for me on my page.
They are for me, and me alone.
They instruct my intention toward devotion and adoration.
Well intended virtues that will fulfill each of us with a never ending satisfaction.


Submitted: February 21, 2021

© Copyright 2021 Elenore B Rigby. All rights reserved.

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DampKitten

I love the canal and sea metaphor. You've worked on this since first publication and I like what you've done.
I will say that the third stanza's double 'virtually' is a bit of a bump in your piece for me. If you dropped the second virtually to the next line, it might help. I'm not sure how in love you are with repeating that word.

Otherwise, as I mentioned previously, I like the personification of the pencil and the second person narrative. Essentially, the speaker is addressing their muse and assigning its origin to an inanimate object. The piece explores the relationship between reality and the imagination, the spirit of creativity.

Mon, February 22nd, 2021 12:13am

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Agreed on the double virtually, I'll take that out.
Thank you! ( :

Sun, February 21st, 2021 5:00pm

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