The Lifting of the Shame

VanillaEssence

To me anyway this is a fabulous literary version of abstract art.
simple and attractive but aggresive to the senses.

Spyguy

Free to love, to be loved, & to brighten the world with verse!!!

DampKitten

You're a deep thinker. I love the image reference. I've read this piece over several times as it deserves because of its depth. I love the concept of 'fragile conscience'...that mystical impalpable substance that steers our ethical compass.

What you're describing is an awakening within the spirit, but the counterintuitive imagery is not a stereotypical starburst elation. Rather, the experience is 'solemn' and unabraded by the inner protective mechanisms. "Savory indulgence" is such a vague and intriguing term that's so poetically suggestive. You've chosen your words well to provide a misty implication.

I like how you move into second person narrative, addressing what sounds like a lover, and inquiring the effect of this revelation. This is a confession but not an apology.

The final stanza is definitive and assertive. A statement of power and prerogative. I like Vanilla's take (abstract art), but I think it's more inspired by that than representative.

As I scanned through the opening lineage of single words, I found them to be haphazardly placed. These are meant to present the multiple emotions of the speaker as an introduction to discourse. However, I think it would be even better if the words were placed in such a way as to infer a direction of change, providing a significance not only to the words themselves but also their position in the piece.

DampKitten

I like it