Eyes of Night

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Status: In Progress  |  Genre: General Erotica  |  House: Booksiesilk Classic Group

Just a rhyme to pass your time.

Eyes of Night

 

Naughty devil, pixie-saint

Soaring free from worn constraints

Beauty’s burden lightly worn

Child of pleasures, pain, and porn

Shape that stirs forgotten lusts

Scars that shield a soul from trust

Fragile sensual glowing grace

Wounds a lover can’t erase

Gifted, fearless, unbent soul

Pilgrim who has paid her toll

Eager men ignore her truth

Beauty blinds, but stays aloof

Taunting hips and bedroom eyes

Haunting depths where woe resides

Who will truly tend her needs?

Pouting lips, un-whispered pleas

 


Submitted: October 14, 2020

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DampKitten

I love the depth of this. You understand alliteration and consonance, how to use those as poetic elements - because this piece is loaded with it. Your meter is perfect as always. What I particularly like is your depiction of a minx who hides beneath her outward appearance a more sullen and devastated being. I'm a fan of short lines with limited syllables for dramatic effect, and each of yours demands pause for reflection. I like the use of "wounds" and "scars", the double meaning of "constraints", the concept of 'beauty's burden'. The imagery is limited, but what there is of it I like.

The theme of the piece is to underscore the dichotomy between outward appearance and inner being, particularly under circumstance of exceptional physical beauty - posing the unstated question as to whether beauty is a gift or a curse.

Really nice piece

Thu, October 15th, 2020 3:49am

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Glad you liked it. Few people read my poems, but sometimes an audience of one is enough.

Wed, October 14th, 2020 9:01pm

DampKitten

You're really good, J

Fri, October 16th, 2020 1:06am

Spyguy

You’ve proven that you can rock a mental boat with your writing, I’m sure you can also rock a world with love!

Sat, October 17th, 2020 4:53pm

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Damp kitten got me thinking about riding waves. It can feel like a state of grace. So can finding her wave length.

Sat, October 17th, 2020 10:06am

Amy F. Turner

Meaty in the duality revealed of pain and pleasure intermixed with emotional and physical restraints. How well do know the people inside who hide all beneath a lie? Lovely piece of flowy perfection. This is better than good. It is great to my ears when lent to air as poems should be. ;)

Tue, October 20th, 2020 5:20pm

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High praise. Thank you so much. Poems do need to be read aloud to be fully appreciated. Thanks

Tue, October 20th, 2020 10:42am

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