Going Down

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Status: In Progress  |  Genre: General Erotica  |  House: Booksiesilk Classic Group

Featured Review on this writing by zebo85

In the seedy part of town...

Going Down
 
 
 
What is it
 
that drives you
 
into deep dark corners
 
inside dimly lit hotel rooms
 
where sultry sounds echo
 
through paper walls?
 
 
 
Penetrating sounds
 
that pound, pound, pound
 
like heavy hammers underground
 
as you watch me
 
watch me
 
going down...
 
watch me going down on him,
 
stroking, stroking
 
your little stem.
 
What pulls you in
 
when darkness falls?
 
 
 
He shoves it down my throat again!
 
Choking, Choking
 
back the tears
 
I take it all
 
and lick his balls
 
that slap against my chin
 
 
 
never knowing if or when
 
he'll shoot his load
 
he'll dump his load
 
right where you should have been.
 
 
 
I see you leaning in!
 
His dick is bigger than your own,
 
much much bigger!
 
And had you known,
 
would you have watched?
 
Watched me sucking on his cock?
 
 
 
Has jealousy turned you into stone?
 
I read you like a book.
 
And now, my love,
 
his seeds are sown -
 
so take a look...
 
 
 
The creamy icing on my face
 
he left for you.
 
Just have a taste!
 
It's foamy, salty like the sea
 
that keeps you swimming back to me
 
through crashing waves
 
that pound, pound, pound
 
like heavy hammers underground...
 


Submitted: December 27, 2019

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Amy F. Turner

Sexy, silky decadence, take what you want of all he's spent. Yum, yum, oh, what fun! As he comes and he comes and gain it all from both ends. Whew! Need to step outside where it's cool.
Thanks for sharing that make the new year to come very hot and sticky. ;)

Fri, December 27th, 2019 5:07pm

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Thank you, Amy! I love warming up your cabin! Your hotel room. Wherever you happen to be! Whatever time of year!
Thanks so much for reading, girl!

Sat, December 28th, 2019 11:43am

zebo85

Your words flow so easily just as the drizzle your imagination pulls from my stiffness..... each and every time I read something you’ve written.

For that, thank you. A thousand thank you’s, in fact.

Fri, December 27th, 2019 6:20pm

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No, Zebo - thank you! A thousand licks on your popsicle. And then, a big suck! I want to pull all that drizzle out!

Sat, December 28th, 2019 11:39am

Dick Wood

Your description was so intense. As if the reader was in the room watching...and wishing to be the one on the receiving end.

Fri, December 27th, 2019 7:04pm

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Thanks, Dick - that was the plan! I'm so glad it worked for you. In fact, wasn't that you?

Sat, December 28th, 2019 11:37am

kalelthemith

I'm afraid that watching such carnality isn't my thing, my thing is that mouth, as she is savouring.

Fri, December 27th, 2019 9:12pm

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See one
Do one
Teach one

Sat, December 28th, 2019 11:34am

kalelthemith

I'm afraid that watching such carnality isn't my thing, my thing is in that mouth, as she is savouring.

Fri, December 27th, 2019 9:12pm

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Your thing is sticking that thing in my thing...so stop beating around the bush

Sat, December 28th, 2019 11:32am

Michael68

So sexy and powerfully lustful. Truly creating an image within the mind. But also showing the way you wish it was your love, rather than someone else. The longing for your love and seeing the Jealousy which he does have. Not stopping the act from happening. Great write.

Sat, December 28th, 2019 3:56am

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Thank you so much, Michael. That's an amazing review. I just love hearing your interpretation! It makes me smile!

Sat, December 28th, 2019 11:29am

puellalove

A wonderful poem. What a style, what an explanation, doubled my desire. Wow wow wow

Sun, December 29th, 2019 10:36pm

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Wow Wow Wow! Doubled your desire! I didn't think you could get any bigger!
Thanks for reading and doubling!

Tue, December 31st, 2019 4:01pm

DLCannon

That was kinda fucked up.

Tue, December 31st, 2019 6:53pm

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Yes, it was. But don't you find the ocean soothing?

Tue, December 31st, 2019 3:57pm

DLCannon

Nothing can be as bad as being forced to watch your partner cheat on you.

Sat, January 11th, 2020 8:50pm

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Well, there may be some things you've not considered - but I get it.

If you read closely though, you'll notice that both parties are there by choice. This is written in the second person addressing the observer and asking him, 'what pulls you in when darkness falls'. In other words, what makes you want to watch me with other men?
The first stanza is an elongated question as to why the observer is there watching all this.
Is the speaker cheating? Well, maybe. Or maybe she and her mate simply meet with a third party in these seedy hotel rooms where he can watch (and lick off the icing).

After all, it's 'foamy like the sea, that keeps you coming back to me'.

Thanks, DL! I love your input!

Sat, January 11th, 2020 3:04pm

DLCannon

I see. Well, I'm not into sharing. It would never bring me back to you. And I doubt he really wants another guy's "icing".

Sat, January 11th, 2020 11:21pm

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LOL...you would be surprised what some guys want.
Anyway, I'll bear that in mind when I come to Oakland, DL. No sharing. You'll have all my attention!

Sat, January 11th, 2020 3:32pm

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