Oh hun that was beautiful but I felt the yearning of sadness You brought me to tears it was so real. So Meaningful and written to perfection Just amazing:) the line: "Shall the tears sooth the burning wounds" was so powerful exquisite!
Just sadly beautiful loved it :)

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Wed, March 22nd, 2017 12:02am

Thank you so much Teresa !!
Sorrow has its own melody but it beautifully hurts gracefully beats the shit out of us
Lol
I was crying too ,the words flowed in the mind when the tears rolled down the eyes xx
Dear friend it is real...
Am so happy that you commented , you cared to express you cared to feel the words.
Thank you sweetness hugs

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Thu, March 23rd, 2017 9:16pm

First the technical stuff: this is free verse, and it floats back and forth between first and second person, intermittently addressing the person who is subject of the poem directly. In poetry, you can get away with all kinds of things that you can't do in prose. I don't at all find the change distracting - if you listen closely to songs, you often notice the same thing. There is some scattered rhyme...I really like "But this heart doesn't deserve what it desires...you set my heart on fire". There is some some suggestion of guilt? Not sure I would substitute 'u' for you there near the end, since there's nothing similar to
that in the piece.

Now content: Wow! Very heavy, very emotional, filled with desire and need and desperation. Really intense. The last line is fantastic! The separation and the sadness are palpable...so is the silence. It's an incredibly moving piece, Crystal...

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Sat, March 25th, 2017 8:23am

Thank You soooo much G!!!

Sometimes words flow out subconsciously the conscious mind is so overwhelmed with emotions

Was in such a hurry to realise its not messaging lol
Thanks G I will edit it. What is scattered rhyme?

The heart feels it must be worthless so it cant attain what it wants
Meeting with its lover burned it passionately with desire but now
The heart on fire is burning without the words of its lover to sooth the pain
Poor confused heart it is its negativity it blames itself that it aint good enough though the fact it still can hear in whispers of its own that its not true..

G your comment left me speechless
I reread it to finally believe that you really liked it so much
Am so very happy
Thank you G from my heart really Thanks dear
(Sighs)