My Fall
Poem by: Awoken
They say I fell hard
From where, I don't know
I'm no saint by all means,
So the heavens closed their gates on me
I've sinned like all who are around,
But even the Devil said I'm not worthy
Both have clipped my wings
And thrown me aside
But then there's you,
My beautiful... Angel...Demon?
I think about you all the time,
I miss your touch so much,
I want you to feel me and taste me when I think about you
And the things you've done to me
Oh God, the things you've done
It's you, always you
You're the reason my wings are gone
But I want more of us together,
More of us united, more of us as one
If this is Limbo,
I'll stay forever with you by my side
If this is Hell,
I'll stay forever with you inside me
If this is Heaven,
I'll stay forever beneath your body
You are my Heaven
You are my Hell
You are my Limbo
I'm at your mercy,
For you made my fall from grace a lasting one
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It happened because you have freckles. Those things are the work of the devil sent to drive men crazy ;-))
All kidding aside I loved this.
xoxoX Ron
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You, Ron, are meant to be tortured. I don't even have that many, so there. Thank you for reading and commenting! Glad you loved it.
A delicious purgatory! What a poet you've become, girl! The repetition of style ..."if this is limbo...if this is hell...if this is Heaven" creates a poetic nuance that's complemented beautifully by your next series; "you are my Heaven...my hell...my limbo". The premise is that this lover is so 'all consuming' as to eradicate the need for anything else...that you want to freeze yourself eternally with him and avoid all natural progression. The curious part is this unspoken 'deviance' that circles the relationship...something so dark as to revoke even the devil's claim on your souls.
It's seductively deep, salaciously disturbing
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Thank you thank you!! Sometimes we delve so deep within ourselves that what we say turns so dark and deep, it becomes scary. Glad you really liked this piece. I think this is my favorite of my poems. Thank you for taking the time to read and deliver such a meaningful comment. I love to read what you take from my works.
Holy shit. It is as if I'm seeing Lucifer. Girl you are starting to give the shivers each time you write a new poem. Keep it up. I love to be shivered.....
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That makes me so proud to know I've given you the shivers. I find the more I write the darker I get. Sometimes it's not even what I planned it just turns out that way. Thank you so much for reading and commenting. So glad you liked it:)
enchanting , like music from the flute fogging the mind and wrapping me up , and am lifted to your world where your words surround me and the images you created in my mind appear in my sight , its dark and thats the softest thing to touch ,
Loved your poem!
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You hear a flute and I hear the cello. Deeper sounds that resonate through me. They speak to me in a way that makes me write. Yay! Glad you loved y poem. I'm on a roll...:))
Wow I loved this. This piece reminds me allot of myself and the conditions in my life. The beautiful angel demon I recognize as my boyfriend. I feel like if I live in hell then I stay forever with him by myside cuz I am so lonely in life and I feel like I need him. He is both an Angel and a devil cuz he has evil way and yet angel ways. I think he has a split personality to him.
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i think everyone has two sides of the coin we face each day. Sometimes the darker demon comes out to play more than the lighter angel. I like how this poem brought more meaning for you on a personal level. Glad you could relate with it and loved it. Thank you:)
This is a nice poem. Another world (I want to take it like this) The mysterious dreams. The need of being forgiven. The sins. And the desire of him which makes it unimportant wherever you are, hell or heaven. Well done
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Another world indeed. Neither here nor there. Heaven or hell be damned. Glad you loved it;) Thanks for the read and comment.
Have you suddenly become awoken to religion & it's teachings my friend? Because this is once again going down that road... But your voice sure makes it hard for one to want to go repent, no more likely relent!!
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You take it how you want to. I love to read everyone's interpretations of my works. So many different way's to be taken.
So long as you don't regret;)) Thanks for the read and comment.
If this is Limbo, if this is Hell, if this is Heaven....im at your mercy, for you made my fall from grace a lasting one.
Love it!!!
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Awe, thanks Nite:)) I think this is one of my favorite poems, and I'm no poet so that's saying something. Especially knowing it actually came my little meager brain. Thanks for reading and commenting:)
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