Forged from Steel
Poem by: Awoken
My skin heats up
The flames burning deep
My body's slick
Glistening from the sweat coating my burning skin
The temperature is perfect
The night air is just right
My body molds to you
As if you're forging me out of steel
The hammer swings down
You thrust in deeper each time
With the resounding metallic bangs
My screams ring throughout
Over and over you slam
Like hammer to steel
My screams are loud
My throat is dry
More with your hammer
Yes, bend me to your will
Take it all from me
Only it belongs to you
Take my flower, my sweet pollen, my body
And mold me, bend me, forge me
For I am your Steel
And you are my Blacksmith
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I love the way you worded this. It reminds me of an old song with the lyrics, "Bend me, shape me, anyway you want me, as long as you love me it's alright."
XoxoX Ron
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Aaahh!! The American Breed's Bend Me Shape Me... catchy tune ;) Thanks for reading my little poem, I appreciate it!
This piece perfectly expresses your need for and love for your partner . All relationships should burn that Hot !!. You express that love so well Ms Awoken , gives me goose bumps !!! He is a lucky guy to have a lady who is so devoted and desirable.
Hot Stuff Ms A....Eadigoo.
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I agree, they should be hot hot hot! I'm glad i was able to express this poem well for you. Thanks for the read and glad you thought it as hot:)
I am loving the poem Awoken. You are just popping them out like it nothing! I am so loving the heat that is coming off of this poem.
"The hammer swings down you thrust in deeper each time"- that just sends fire's blazing...I loved reading that part. This whole poem was just a GREAT read Awoken!!
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I've had some new inspiration come to me recently, thanks. Keep the fire extinguishers handy cause this blaze will never burn itself out. Glad you thought it was great. Thanks for the read and comment, Love. Appreciate it:)
Wooo this girl is on fire!!! Awesome read girl ...awesome.
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Now I have that song in my head... thanks;) Glad you thought it was awesome, Nite, thanks:)
Fabulously original and easy to read.I just loved reading this.Looks like Blacksmiths still reign in some bedrooms.
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Gotta love a man with hot iron and a hammer! Thanks for reading and commenting. I'm glad you loved it:)
MMMMMM....how sultry! The whole poem is a metaphor and it's fantastic, girl! Fabulous analogy...love the molten imagery, the smoldering seduction! What every man should be to a woman!
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Fantastic, oh thank you GG!!! So glad you liked it. I'm really trying this poetry thing.... thank you for all your encouragement:)
I love the metaphors through out this poem. Great work.
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Thanks so much, Sam! I appreciate you taking the time to read something of mine :)
The honor is all mine. It is rare to find talent as great as yours.
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Wow, Sam... Thank you. That's awesome of you to think so:)
I really loved your analogy! You set the readers mind to whirl in the mental images you produce!
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Well i certainly tried to set a certain image for the readers. I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for the read and comment:)
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