The Dark is No Place for You
Poem by: allofthesevoices
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The day melted into every shade of orange that has ever fallen from a tree.
And you mumbled “If I were as dazzling as the sun, I would never want to set”
as you stared into the sky, wishing for the life of a burning ball of gas.
I want to tell you
"Darling, you could be brighter than any star
yet there is a shadow swallowing you whole.
You’ve crept into the concrete darkness and I am trying to pull you back
but my hand keeps slipping in the void as you pull away.
Why do you try to run?
Surely you know that I cannot chase your dimming light forever.
Surely you know that the fireflies can see right through you.
You aren’t welcome in the dark.
There, you are an impostor from a world ablaze.
The natives are already short of supplies in the vacuum.
The oxygen has run out and they are gasping for breath;
there is simply no more room for one more lung to fill.
Let me make you a home here. In the light.
The dark is no place for you. It is bleak. It is nothingness.
You are everything."
Submitted: March 29, 2015
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It might be just me...but did you intend the space between tree and and. Or should there be a period and a capital A on and. Also, should there be quotation marks starting at But darling? I am certainly no pro, and especially with poetry and prose, but I do know that paragraphs, line breaks, and punctuation can get messed up when downloading - especially using any other program than Word. Again, your writing is beautiful and I truly look forward to your next posting. Hugs, Aly Feel free to email me if you have any questions or to just chat. Love supporting the writers that give me great enjoyment. alywilldo@yahoo.com
Sun, March 29th, 2015 1:56pm
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That could have just been me being sloppy ^.^ I edited it so that it is hopefully easier to understand.
Sun, March 29th, 2015 7:38am
Yay! It is now perfect. So beautiful. I see you posted another one that I am on to read right now.
Tue, March 31st, 2015 9:43pm
Very touching and emotional. ~Krystal
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Alyson Williams
Oh wow! I loved this. Wasn't sure it was a poem at first but you got me there quickly. Beautiful! Just need a little formatting changes. You are new to the site and formatting is a common problem. Bravo!!!! Look forward to more of your postings. I am a fan!
Sun, March 29th, 2015 2:31amAuthor
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My poetry tends to lean more toward the prose side of things, yes. What about the formatting was iffy, if I may ask?
Sat, March 28th, 2015 7:36pmThank you though!!! and thanks for the feedback!