Rain

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksiesilk Classic Group


You were just like a killing rain,
destroying all you found,
 to build your temple of power,
scorching like merciless acid.,
sharp like a crusader's blade,
efficient like a poisoned arrow,
leaving small drops of sweet dew
as maddeningly elusive tokens
of something that passed for love.


Submitted: July 11, 2022

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Spyguy

Such sadness, such a depth of despair;
I pray for my Lizziewolf, I pray for repair!
To've been so deceived, to've been so used:
A devilish soul, who has her so abused!!!
Look inside Princess, look inside Dear...
Majesty resides, just cast out your fear!
You were born noble, you were born free ->
A Princess resides, where you cannot see!
Your Father the King, to mind He would bring:
Hidden great talents, help you to sing;
So do not despair, from a tyrannical fool:
No, look inside self, you'll realize you're "Cool"
Yes Princess Lizzie, my magnificent friend ~
You truly are Princess, & this aint the end!

Mon, July 11th, 2022 8:35pm

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Dearest Spyguy...for once I was rendered speechless, I don´t know what to say! Thank you so much for your wonderful words! Love, Lizzie.

Tue, July 12th, 2022 6:22am

DampKitten

That one is a little different for you, Lizzie. I like it. Honestly, I don't think of rain as a natural killer, though I get the acid thing. Frost is a more common analogy, but you might have been looking for something less typical.

Your piece reminded me of a poem you should read...mind you, it's ethnic, and intentionally so. It took me a while to find it.

"I'm a Fool to Love You" by Cornelius Eady

Tue, July 12th, 2022 3:48am

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Thank you dearest Damp Kitten! I will look for the poem. Love, Lizzie,

Tue, July 12th, 2022 6:24am

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