Featured Review on this writing by DampKitten
"Oh, that’s good. The whole poem qualifies as a single sentence. Rueful and somber.
I love “December’s beach”.
I don’t know about “to gain” the widow’s watch…maybe “to keep” or “begin”. When I first read this it felt like ghosts waiting on ghosts.
Haunting.
"
Whaler’s wives
Whaler's wives have risen, for their husbands
Lost at sea, and hasten from the churchyards,
And to December's beach, to keep once more
The widow's watch, where hopefully they waited,
With flagging smiles and panicked hearts, and rain
Upon their prayer books, then tears atop their
Caskets, put low beneath that hallowed ground.
Submitted: May 28, 2022
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Oh, that’s good. The whole poem qualifies as a single sentence. Rueful and somber.
I love “December’s beach”.
I don’t know about “to gain” the widow’s watch…maybe “to keep” or “begin”. When I first read this it felt like ghosts waiting on ghosts.
Haunting.
Author
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Thanks, DampKitten. I'm going to incorporate your suggestion because I agree. Ok, yes. Improved greatly.
Whaler’s wives
Whaler's wives have risen, for their husbands
Lost at sea, and hasten from the churchyards,
And to December's beach, to keep once more
The widow's watch, where hopefully they waited,
With flagging smiles and panicked hearts, and rain
Upon their prayer books, then tears atop their
Caskets, put low beneath that hallowed ground.
Laird
Spyguy
A whale of a tale... And that's what she said!
Wed, June 1st, 2022 5:12pm