Heart Stop

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Status: In Progress  |  Genre: Literary Erotica  |  House: Booksiesilk Classic Group

Avery Sobelman was trying to get her life on track. Escaping an abusive relationship, starting a new job and finally living her life free. When a man from her past suddenly appears after 20 years she has to decide if the love they once had was worth fighting for or if his secrets are enough to tear them apart.

Table of Contents

PROLOGUE

His name was Nathan.   I've known him since high school, He was my first love at 16 years old. We parted ways for years but ... Read Chapter

Waking up was always a chore. My eyes struggled to open against the morning sun and I sighed in irritation. “Adam, you forgot to cl... Read Chapter

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Rage bubbled up inside of me and for some reason it felt... good. I liked it. Impulsively I decided that I needed an outlet for that rage... Read Chapter

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Recent Comments

Harriet-Jacqui's Hormones

Off to a flyer! "Welcome back!"

Fri, September 17th, 2021 9:00pm

Author
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Thanks! It feels good to be back! ;)

Fri, September 17th, 2021 3:18pm

DampKitten

Love your last name...really like Lewis Capaldi too.
I like prologues to set the stage, and that's what you're doing here. It's a nice summary of where you once were as the speaker and where you now exist.

Having said that, the prologue feels a bit superficial. I'd honestly consider a scene from the past as opposed to describing this 16 yr old guy with a spoon feed narrative to the reader. Let the reader see what he was like and what the relationship entailed by simply presenting it via some pinnacle moment. Give us the dialogue. Give us vision of what was actually happening so many years ago between star crossed lovers. Give us the real time instead of descriptive analysis. Let your reader figure this guy out based on what you show us.

Mon, September 20th, 2021 2:03am

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I had genuinely thought of that, however, with what I have in mind I feel descriptive analysis works here. It's what I was going for, piquing a general curiosity, however, I can also see your point. Thanks for the input.

Mon, September 20th, 2021 4:32am

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