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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Adult Romance  |  House: Booksiesilk Classic Group

something from long ago

I am the storm cloud:
  the unexpected gust
  the flashes of lightning
  the torrents.
You are the sea:
  the white caps
  rising to my squall line
  the depths still hidden.

Submitted: September 02, 2021

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I'm a big fan of abbreviated poetry such as this. Your primary poetic element here is metaphor, the most obvious analogy being yourself to a storm and the person you address to the sea, but there's also an analogy between the two of you as well reflected in the impact from one to the other. I'm particularly fond of the emphasis on 'mystery' - the unknown beyond the depths of the deep.

Fri, September 3rd, 2021 3:22pm


Thank you!

Fri, September 3rd, 2021 7:34pm

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